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    dots Submission Name: Pleasure of the nitedots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsPleasure of the nitedots
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    Staring into the watering stream,
    Listening to a mermaid sing.
    Her madrigal performance etched in stone,
    Composing her ecstasy in moans.
    She is my angel of the sea.
    She knows the secrets deep within me.
    I seek her nectar of love.
    Climax met releasing of the libido dove.
    Her body trembles with delight.
    Oh, the pleasures,
    The pleasures, of the night.




    Submitted on 2004-01-28 15:14:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is shortly beautiful on the fact that I believe every male writer of poetry who has that true lover would compare them to a mermaid or some other radiant fantasy figure coming from their feelings while surviving times that turn into 'marble memories' that you cherish holding on to.
    Funny because I thought about using that mermaid concept to do something about a particular female but I kinda just cruised away from it but this leaves me with a question.
    Lol did the sound of a harp ever come over you that night? Just wondering.
    A cascade pops into the minds eye.
    | Posted on 2011-01-29 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      great subject man, i love how you put the mermaid in there, it give the poem a sureal effect, like a almost relike dreamyness, i think i may know what i'm dreaming about tonight
    | Posted on 2004-01-28 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]


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