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Mirrored Reality

Author: Shadow_Mirror
ASL Info:    23/m/CA
Elite Ratio:    4.59 - 54 /39 /18
Words: 60
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I had to write a poem for English, and this is what came out of it... did it in about 10 mins, so it's not that great really.

Mirrored Reality

'On a day that is blue,
On a day that is true.
We find ourselfs hoping against hope,
that we'll tread the life of the fairy tale.
To fly in the sky,
To swim in the sea,
To feel an inner glow...
We all wish for our fairy tale to be real,
But wake with only the illision of reality.'

Submitted on 2006-10-28 02:29:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This piece shouts out that it was written in 10 minutes. It is rather jumpy and humpy and meanders all over the horizon. Sorry i couldn't be more positive in this review.
| Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
  Reality is a neccesary evil is it not? As you pointed out illusions are much more addictive and pleasurable. A brilliant piece I can relate to. Thanx.
| Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
  haha, whoops, I did post this... *goes and deletes other one* well, I guess I'll just have to make a new one then today to make up for that little blunder.. thanks whirl
| Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by Shadow_Mirror | [ Reply to This ]
  i've already seen this!! you've posted it twice.
but you completely underestimate yourself. this is a great poem for 10 minutes work!!
i don't think you realise just how poetic you are, and you should!!
| Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  Idealism versus Realism. Fairy tales don't come true but we can dream about them.
Reality as an illusion? Strange concept. But then again, I'm being too literal.
Good write.

| Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]

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