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I am hidden behind lies


Author: girly101
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I am hidden behind lies



im happy for the moment
glad for the day

but when my feelings overflow
this will go away

i may laugh an endless laugh
when in side i cry an endless cry

i may sit here and say im okay
even tho i want to die

and even tho i smile
i feel all the pain

tho u dont see me crie
my tears flow like rain

but ill pretend im okay
ill say im great

and all the while
im starting this hopeless fate

is this my destiny
is this the life im bound to live

or will i simply hide away
until my life should give




Submitted on 2006-10-28 09:28:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  [censored] yeah!!! thats what id rank this. this is exactly what i do pretty much everyday. you hit the nail right on the head. GOOD JOB!
-aaron
| Posted on 2010-09-18 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]
  holy crap. this is an excellent poem i must say. if you thought the last one i commented on was childish. i must say this is good. i feel those feelings on a constant basis, therefore i can relate. inside i think most people are crying and wont admit it, even to them selfs, and you have used your poetry to express thoughts that many people refuse to say. bravo for u. and the ryming scheme, worked well.

read more later;

Death
| Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by DeathTone | [ Reply to This ]


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