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    dots Submission Name: Seasonsdots
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    Author: Peggy Paris
    ASL Info:    61/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 747/570/167
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 961
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    Description:
       This poem is written in a form called the Oddquain. It consists of seventeen syllables distributed 1, 3, 5, 7, 1 in five lines. The form was developed by Glenda L. Shank. My poem is in oddquain sequences with monorhyme.


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    dotsSeasonsdots
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    Trees,
    in Fall's breeze
    with colored leaves, tease
    as degrees, ignoring pleas,
    freeze.

    Snow
    soon will blow,
    as Winter's days flow,
    dropping temperatures go
    low.

    Bring
    season's king,
    with sprouting seedling,
    to rid us of Winter's sting...
    Spring!

    Yet,
    to Spring wet,
    Summer owes its debt
    that's, as seasons' cycles set,
    met.




    Submitted on 2006-10-28 12:52:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, i have never seen style this before! it sounds so beautiful, too.
    i really like this...might try this style myself, although, it looks kinda tricky.
    you created nice visions with this,
    good job!
    michelle
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn, now this was pretty creative. You took the circular notion of seasons and made this your own. At first, I wasn't feeling the rhyme almost every word, but you made it flow so well. The cadence in this poem was pretty much un-flawed. And the images you created were just as exhilerating. Nicely done in my opinion.
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by PaintTheSkyBlak | [ Reply to This ]


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