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Before My Eyes

Author: drow
ASL Info:    29/male/married
Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 14 /16 /7
Words: 72
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
Total Views: 754
Average Vote:    3.0000
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Before My Eyes

The nights are getting colder
days seem to be shorter.
Winter is around the corner
everyday might be the last
and the next a begining.

The moon shines bright
and the sun starts to dim.
Darkness covers part of the earth
as the light covers the rest.

Love opens doors
as hate shuts them.

Time flies by
as life stands still,
when one thing dies
another one is born.

Submitted on 2006-10-28 20:36:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a really good poem. I like the metaphors. They add to it really well. Live for today not for tomorrow. Tomorrow will come in time.
| Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
  dude you are not bad, for a first timer. lol.

hey i liked it alot, when i have more time i promis to write more about it, you need to put more up so i can comment on more than two. and dont give me the whole i dont have time. ya ya ya. anyhow. nice step putting your stuff out there. shows alot.

| Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by DeathTone | [ Reply to This ]
  that was good..great work..nice read..keep up the good work..
| Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by DeathsWife | [ Reply to This ]

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