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    dots Submission Name: Rambling Thoughtsdots
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    Author: drow
    ASL Info:    29/male/married
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 14/16/7
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsRambling Thoughtsdots
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    The times I have at night
    I stare at the stars,
    and watch people walk by.

    Random thoughts run threw my head,
    but one thought always runs ramped.

    It seems through the years I have enjoyed
    every person i have seen or known.
    There is one thing I noticed,
    I always see people come and go.

    All the places I have lived,
    wither it be a short time or long time.
    I see people arrive after me
    and then leave before me.

    The rampaging thought makes me wonder
    if it is a curse for the rest of my life
    or is it a burdon,
    that will end someday.

    One thing that stays true
    is the stars I stare at
    will always remain.




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      I can relate to this.
    It's really tough being the leader for everyone, especially when they decide they don't like your cause and go follow someone else's. It's extremely fickle and irritating, but a person (sadly) gets used to it after a while.
    One thing's for sure the stars that are true friends will always be there , and they sure as sugar don't change sides.
    Cheers and keep writing.
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2006-11-03 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      Some things will never change and because of that cherish them more. This was also good.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
      even though you didnt comment on mine dude, im goona be nice and do yours. it was a little hard to understand in terms of what you were trying to say. but i will give it atry. pretty much the person is a wonder and never really in the same place for too long. would like to have freindships and relationships but just cant because of who or what they do. so the only comfort that they are given is from the stars that never leave them.

    Death
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by DeathTone | [ Reply to This ]
      hey you..it was so good...great job..keep up the good work..
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by DeathsWife | [ Reply to This ]
      This was good though I'm not exactly clear on what you're point it; but here goes; This person never really fit in, so he spent his time wondering what was so different about him and the people he watched passing by him and why they always seemed happy, he thought about things in order to alliviate his problems but really he just made his pain worse because he couldn't justify what's so different about him, and than in his random wonderings he decided that very few things stay the same and remain constnat....hence his intrest in the "stars" because they were symbolic of one thing that was there with him no matter where he went and didn't seem to deviate from the nature he had first believed them to have.
    nice write, welcome to ES,
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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