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Author: runedot
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I was... um... just thinking... and this is the consequence...


...And Lo! And Behold! The world is revealed to us as it once was... Desolate. No life exists, the world was a barren wasteland as far as the eyes could see. It was in all sense of the word - Desolate.
And Lo! And Behold! The world is revealed to us as it shall become... Desolate. All life has perished, the lifeforce of the world is spent, and all that exists are the echoes of the present. It shall be as before - Desolate.
And Lo! And Behold! The world is revealed to us as it currently is... Desolate. Although life exists, it is the poison and the bane of the world. It is, as it was, and as it shall be - Desolate.
...And Lo! And Behold! The world is revealed to us as it was, is, and forever shall be, yea, even unto the end of days... Desolate.

Submitted on 2004-05-27 00:26:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the repetition in this one, as well as all the imagery you have put in such as ' barren wasteland', and 'the lifeforce of the world is spent'. Again probably by accident, you have got the link to the Bible, in the wording of 'And Lo! And Behold!', which gives it more meaning as you are saying what once was great is now desolate.
A truthful piece of writing that I enjoyed reading. Thanks.
| Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by selfbetrayal | [ Reply to This ]

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