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    dots Submission Name: Footprints Of A Portaitdots
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFootprints Of A Portaitdots
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    Within the stroke
    of every key,
    electronic footprints
    sketch a portrait of my love
    my pain, and loyalty.

    Look deeply
    at this canvas
    and possibly you'd see,
    you are the inspiration
    in every brush of my reality.





    Submitted on 2006-10-29 00:19:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Short, but poetic through and through. Nice imagery there. When I read it I imagined you were referring to your poetry. The "stroke of every key", every character you type on the keyboard. "electronic footprints" the words that form themselves across the screen. The "portrait" and the "canvas" are the poem itself, once complete, inspired by... well, whoever "you" is. It probably isn't an authentic assumption, but it's one I am content with. Good job.

    DeepDreamer2008
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by DeepDreamer2008 | [ Reply to This ]


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