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    dots Submission Name: Feeling A Feelingdots
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    Author: Never Known
    Elite Ratio:    6.86 - 21/13/9
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsFeeling A Feelingdots
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    Maybe...

    I'm just feeling
    this feeling
    way too much.
    I'm letting
    this obsession
    become my crutch...

    I'm just painting
    this painting
    of the same damn thing.
    I'm strumming
    the same lullaby
    on a worn out string.


    But...

    No one ever sees
    the seas of tears
    I'm always drowning in.
    No one cares
    I'm going down
    this road again...

    No one ever hears
    me screaming here
    for just a little peace..
    No one seems to notice
    that I crave
    momentary release.


    So...

    I'll just keep
    my clutch
    on this faithful crutch.
    I'll keep on singing
    this same sad song
    I've sung far too much.














    Submitted on 2006-10-29 01:26:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      disarmingly simple. The format seems almost raw to the point of child-like, yet the depth is in plain view. I really like it. I have no idea what you were going for, but I like what I got from it.
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by Mr_Eff | [ Reply to This ]


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