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    dots Submission Name: cease to feeldots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 292/310/149
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 926
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Lieing today.
    Dying someway.
    Crying tomorrow.
    Maybe drowning in my sorrow.

    Lifting my head so u can see my tears.
    Being suffocated with all my fears.
    Screaming for help as my world begins to fall.
    Encaged in my thoughts surrounded by them all.

    Underneath me is my ocean of tears.
    Around me is my mist of fears.
    In me is the pain so real.
    That I wish I could only cease to feel




    Submitted on 2006-10-29 09:51:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      theres a lot of people that can relate to this. the piece itself, is short and simple but has a nice ring to it as the words escape my lips as i silently it aloud to myself. very good.
    -aaron
    | Posted on 2010-09-18 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]
      i lked this, it is very well rhymed, quite a deep sorrowful, sad poem. maybe you should have put something into the poem about your fears.like what are you afraid of.
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]


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