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    dots Submission Name: just hate medots
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    Author: girly101
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    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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    dotsjust hate medots
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    hate me today
    hate me for the moment
    hate me for always
    hate me through all my days

    hate me for being
    hate me for liveing
    hate me for trying
    hate me for dieing




    Submitted on 2006-10-29 10:08:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is good. its deep. its simple. reminds me of Blue Octobers "Hate Me" song. i can only fathom what would turn out like if you made it longer.
    -aaron
    | Posted on 2010-09-18 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]
      It reminded me of a Blue October song. But don't worry, I love Blue October... so it's a compliment.

    I like this, but it seems like there should be more. All the things you're telling the person to hate you for are sort of overdone. Maybe throw in some words that are less common.
    I don't know. Just suggestions.

    Good stuff

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      this is sounds sort of like blue october hate me song. but other than that you should add more to the poem it feels unfinished.

    peace,
    becka
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]
      ehhh, this could be soo much better!
    i don't agree with El with liking it.
    you should expand more and explain WHY you think you should be hated, etc.
    i'm new to your work, but i can tell you can write and this isn't a best.

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      this is quite sad but i like it. I like because it touches my heart. it kinda reaches out to my own personal feelings. nice write. now i really hope you dont really want people to hate you because you are worth more. i know i dont know you but i know also know noone deserve to be hated for no real reason.
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]


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