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    dots Submission Name: My Heart's Desiredots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 709
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 869



    Description:
       This is something I have never wrote about before. Especially with the sexual content lol. Well not this way anywho...But, I feel the need to expand, so this is new from me lol. Let me know what you think..


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    dotsMy Heart's Desiredots
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    To snuggle up at sunset,
    Hold you close all night,
    Make love beneath the stars,
    A wondrous delight...

    Just to be near you,
    Feel your naked skin,
    I need you beside me,
    To feel you deep within...

    Just to have you kiss my lips,
    And hear you call my name,
    After this love experienced,
    I will never be the same...

    Like a flicker of a candle,
    You've sparked something inside,
    A feeling I cannot conceal,
    Nevermind how I try...

    My heart is now yours,
    To do with what you will,
    You have me entranced,
    And I'm loving it still...

    You've set my heart ablaze,
    An everlasting, brilliant fire,
    No matter how I try to deny,
    You've become my heart's desire...




    Submitted on 2006-10-29 10:13:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow this is beautiful. I had my own experiences running through my mind. This is a very well written. The flow is flawless and the images it brings to the mind are unforgettable! I really enjoyed it!
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      this is uncannily similar to one of mine. read my poem 'to be with you'.
    almost exactly alike....word for word
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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