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    dots Submission Name: Pourdots
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    Author: EL
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 272/189/52
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 622
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    Bytes: 169



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       i wrote this a night or two ago. i wrote it because i felt sad and angry its the way i felt that someone was treating my feelings. give me comments and i will be sure to comment on your work as well.


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    dotsPourdots
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    I pour my heart,
    I pour my soul,
    Into a cup
    for you to take,
    You spill it out,
    Throw it away,
    Into the trash is where it stays.




    Submitted on 2006-10-29 10:16:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A lot of emotion in a short piece, but point was well received.

    | Posted on 2014-09-17 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      short crisp and too the point


    i know how that feels

    giving your life too someone and they dont even appreciate it or even take the time to see what you go through and the things you would give up for them....

    words are stronger than anything else according to this piece

    <3 truthbetold
    | Posted on 2007-07-05 00:00:00 | by truthbetold | [ Reply to This ]
      it was pained. it really was good, and it reminded me of a lyric by the red hot chili peppers - "i pour my life into a paper cup..."
    good name too!
    | Posted on 2007-07-01 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]
      SHORT, SIMPLE.. I LOVED iit! ITS SO TRUE! great job!!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Toxic | [ Reply to This ]
      This one is very short (obviously) but it still tells so much. It just goes to show that even the shortest of rhymes can still say "once upon a time..."
    Good job!

    - MEG -
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by PolaroidMemory | [ Reply to This ]
      very short, very sad. says a lot given that you only used 29 words...i like it.
    nicely done,
    whirl
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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