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    dots Submission Name: **My Name [Lengthened]dots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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       I was told in another poetry site thing that I should lengthen this, so here is a lengthened version. Check it out.

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    dots**My Name [Lengthened]dots

    My name
    is a river
    which flows
    with great ease;
    where rocks
    land in triumph
    and skip by peacefully.

    My name
    knows no end
    for miles
    down the road;
    swivelling and swerving
    not knowing
    where to go.

    My name
    speaks gently
    of a soft,
    powerful soul;
    searching for
    answers to
    inexplicable questions.

    My name
    leads a youngster
    through mysteries
    of life lived in
    sorrow, to
    eternal joy.

    My name
    but a name
    if called another
    would taste just
    as sweet
    But my name holds
    the truth
    beneath my skin.

    Submitted on 2006-10-29 10:46:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      liked the idea of this, and how it flowed well,. very unique and well written..

    My name
    but a name
    if called another
    would taste just
    as sweet
    But my name holds
    the truth
    beneath my skin.

    loved the last stanza,, it really finishes it off well.. and really sets the message out..

    keep writing,, its really good,,

    we be in touch,, cheers..
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by -=Bass=- | [ Reply to This ]
    I like the way you lengthened this one and added more emotion to an already well written write
    I never go back and correct writes but with what what you did with this one I see sometimes its not such a bad idea
    Names are just a way of people distinguishing us from one person from another
    It is as you pointed out whats inside that truly seperates us from one another
    Great Job!!!
    Look forward to your next write
    God Bless

    Please keep in touch
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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