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Author: elseibi
ASL Info:    20/f/uk
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Words: 140
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Hearing the truth about yourself from someone you once loved can give you a plain, painful realisation about the person you really are. This happened to me and i'll never forget it.


I know now whats wrong with me,
i see why it always ends,
why i cause myself this pain,
and still want to be friends,

I know now whats wrong with me,
but why must it be so ?
why did i give my heart to you,
and tell you then to go ?

I know now whats wrong with me,
should i give up yet ?
whenever i'm close enough to love,
i'll break both our hearts you can bet.

I know now whats wrong with me,
will this cycle ever end ?
i fall in love, force it to leave,
the pain stays with me till the end,

I know now whats wrong with me,
you told me blunt and true,
you even pity me, you said,
to be honest, i do too.

Submitted on 2006-10-29 15:19:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a remarkable poem that is reads well and has a clever ending! You have lots of talent, Louise!
| Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  If you're in love stay with it. Don't be scared of the intimacy that it can offer. Love gives and never takes away.
| Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]

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