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Submission Name: Bloodied Blade of Betrayal dots

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Author:	precious_poetry
ASL Info:	19 F TN
Elite Ratio:	3.17 - 137/145/67
Words:	71

Class/Type:	Poetry/Betrayal
Total Views:	744
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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Description:
*Clears throat*... Yeah. Long story behind this one, just a doodle really. Hope its enjoyable.

Bloodied Blade of Betrayal dots

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This blade in my back,
Covered in my blood,
Held by your hand,
The one I loved.

Your act so cruel,
I bleed to death,
You simply watch,
As I draw last breath.

You shed not a tear,
Over my lifeless corpse,
Just go, walk away,
How easily you warp...

Your true being shows,
By the blood on this blade,
Lodged in my back,
How I've been betrayed...

Submitted on 2006-10-29 15:23:43 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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full of emotion and pain especially the pain of betrayal and deception. it could be longer though because somehow it feels unfinished.

peace,
becka
| Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]

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