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    dots Submission Name: Bloodied Blade of Betrayaldots

    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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       *Clears throat*... Yeah. Long story behind this one, just a doodle really. Hope its enjoyable.

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    dotsBloodied Blade of Betrayaldots

    This blade in my back,
    Covered in my blood,
    Held by your hand,
    The one I loved.

    Your act so cruel,
    I bleed to death,
    You simply watch,
    As I draw last breath.

    You shed not a tear,
    Over my lifeless corpse,
    Just go, walk away,
    How easily you warp...

    Your true being shows,
    By the blood on this blade,
    Lodged in my back,
    How I've been betrayed...

    Submitted on 2006-10-29 15:23:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      full of emotion and pain especially the pain of betrayal and deception. it could be longer though because somehow it feels unfinished.

    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]

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