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The ones i love


Author: elseibi
ASL Info:    20/f/uk
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The ones i love



The worst pain
knowing you cant protect
the ones you love most
you tried to help them
but one by one
they still get hurt
like all the others
why is it always
the ones we love
who get hurt
who ket killed
who get raped
beaten
bruised
beyond recognition
i try my hardest
to protect them
and still
the world
tears them down
crying helps them less
than doing nothing
i stay strong
if only
for the ones i love




Submitted on 2006-10-29 16:25:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is so touching, and it is written with such tenderness and concern! I've often wondered why bad things seem to happen more to the "good guys" than to the bad guys!
| Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  Beautiful poem. Always stand up for your friends. Never let them down and they will in turn help you too.
Katana
| Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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