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the world

Author: elseibi
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the world

the world isn't so dark,
that all light is gone,
its beautiful, i know,
i can still see it,
though i feel pain,
and see hardships,
the beauty in the world,
is brighter than anything,
and this is what keeps me confident,
for the future,
that there will be a day ,
when we will all smile,
and everyone will see,
the beauty all around us,
for now i'll watch,
and hope that day comes soon.

Submitted on 2006-10-29 16:29:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I'll have to take up Katana's viewpoint on this. I believe there is a beauty in this world, but it's more in the natural around us. Much of humanity's current method sickens me, and I find it hard to reconcile people as a whole with the small number of individuals I know and love.

I hope, I sincerely hope, that the world changes while I'm still this side of the grave. It's got sixty years or so. However, with what I've seen, I can't be holding my breath.

Keep your eyes open, Lou.

--crimson echo
| Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
  Beauty hoped for and soon to be revealed! This is very peaceful and reassuring! Nice work, Louise!
| Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really beautiful
I too have a vision of World Peace happening in my lifetime but if it dosent I know as a fact it will come in due time
It has too
Its the only way this world will be saved from man made negativity destroying Gods Beautiful Gift
I like the way you wrote this
This was to me a Plea to hopefully make others aware we are destroting the Earth and we have to come together as One to save Her Beautiful Form
Excellent Job!!!
I look forward to reading more writes from you
God Bless

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
| Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I hope it comes real soon. For when it does all of heaven will shine upon us. That's the best thing you can hope for.
| Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
  i agree, this is beautiful.a poem full of makes a refreshing change.
i also agree with katana, i hope it comes real soon!
thank you for sharing this,
| Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

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