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Verse 1: you're silent, and it's just not like you I would try to bring some comfort but I know there is none for this type of hurt not when you were forced to play the game to which you did not know the rules not that they mattered cause your heart still got shattered Chorus: you took your chance when you rolled the dice but it wasn't right because the tables were tilted against you making sure you could not win and you lost everything including your heart to these stupid love games Verse 2: I don't know what you are thinking and I don't know if I should ask or just let you iet and lick all of your wounds so you can find your own way to heal when you should have never been hurt but they didn't care how much it was for you to bare Verse 3: I didn't want you to go through all the shit that I had to but really it's your decisions and I can only help to point you in the right direction cause you have to walk through the door I will pray for you and you better make it through Coda: you took your chance when you rolled the dice and you lost everything to these stupid these stupid these stupid love games |
Pretty good lyrics, actually. Obviously, this not being a poem I have no authority to comment on rhyme or rhythm, but I doubt those are big issues with regards to this piece. The narrator could be anyone talking to anyone else, but somehow I imagined a (single) mother who has been hurt time and time again addressing her teenaged daughter. It fits. Writing in the second person is affective here and although the language is simplistic, it's logically so. These are great lyrics, that's what I think. Now thoughts aside, I've got a couple of nitpicks. Verse one, line five; "rules". Verse two, line three; "sit and lick". Verse three, line two; put a comma after "to", line three; "decision" without the 's'. Keep writing, DeepDreamer2008 | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by DeepDreamer2008 | [ Reply to This ] | |