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The Princess and the Dragon


Author: rememberplaydoh
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This is a fantasy "story-poem"/love story. I hope you'll enjoy it.


The Princess and the Dragon



Once in a distant country
there lived a maiden fair,
with beautiful dark lashes
and shining golden hair.

A princess she was, truly,
though know it, she did not;
she tried to find life's beauty,
but dreadful was her lot.

One night, while still a child,
she'd been stolen from her bed
and whisked off by a dragon
with dark skin and eyes so red.

He kept her in his lair.
She rarely saw the sun
and oft' in her spare moments
hoped her rescuer would come.

Despairing, she grew older
yet no knight for her appeared.
The dragon's power grew
and he became all that she feared.

One day a knight approached her
and offered her his hand.
But, as knights go, he was weak;
the dragon took her back again.

Mournfully, she waited,
a smile masked her woe.
She wondered if all knights
were like the one who'd left her so.

At last another rescuer,
this time a true knight, came.
But trust him, she did not,
believing he would be the same.

Our prince then took his sword
and lifting it on high,
with one blow, slew the dragon.
"For you, my love!" he cried.

As dragon died, the knight
turned to his maiden fair
and said, "My gorgeous princess,
let's leave this dragon's lair."

Now free, the princess smiled
and took the prince's hand.
No more proof was needed
he'd made her understand.

They climbed aboard his stallion.
He took her far away
to his enchanted kingdom.
They live there, still, today.




Submitted on 2006-10-30 12:00:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is wonderful! The perfect fairy tale. The rhyme scheme you've used, although common, fits in well with the nature of the story, and as far as rhyming goes, you've done a good job. Whereas many fairy tales leave me depressed due to the over-exagerrated nature of them, the bouncy tone here left me smiling.

For the sake of nitpicking, I'll give you some suggestions of my own. In the third stanza, the word "so" sounds like you put it in just for the rhythm, so why not replace it with another word, e.g: "deep red". Now in stanza six, the words "hand" and "again" don't really rhyme. This is big shake to the flow of the rest of the poem. Here's a replacement you can use if you like:

"One day a knight approached her
and offered her his hand.
But, as knights go, he was weak;
Never a chance did he stand"

Or along those lines. You're the better judge. In stanza ten, you could either say "the dragon" or capitolise "Dragon" to make the phrase grammatically correct.

That aside, I did enjoy this piece. Thank you.

DeepDreamer2008
| Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by DeepDreamer2008 | [ Reply to This ]


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