Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Mercy Pleasedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Strator
    ASL Info:    22/M/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 160/142/67
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 1104
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 670



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMercy Pleasedots
    -------------------------------------------


    When you die could you scream?
    Make it real so we believe...
    Mercy for you mercy for me,
    Lets do a little dance as we make ourselves,
    Bleed.

    When you die could you scream?
    The rain begins to fall...
    Blood running down your arm,
    Can you feel it,
    Is it true?

    When you die could you scream?
    People haven't seen shit...
    Thinking they understand,
    What it feels like,
    Mercy without sin.

    So when you die could you please
    scream for me...
    When you cry let it flow,
    Make sure when you bleed,
    You ask for mercy please




    Submitted on 2006-10-30 12:37:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Thats the most [censored] emo [censored] iv ever [censored] seen

    Retire because your going to kill yourself sooner or later ya big [censored] emo kid.

    ~Your pal
    Steve C.
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by dontgetemo | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh, another amazing piece written by thee.
    going to the favs. <3
    everyone can relate and knows what you're talking about.
    i love it.
    you don't hear it all the time.

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, did you know that if you put this poem to a bit of music it could sound so f-ing awesome! The way you describe the scene is marvolous, it's a very nice addition to your repitior. Bravo...

    Acid
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Acid | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really deep
    I believe you are talking about People who turn to God for salvation when they are ready to die but havent even thought of doing so when they were alive
    I may be wrong with this interpetation but that is the vision this write gave to me
    I believe and I stress this is just my opinion
    That God is a Peace Loving God and he warmly welcomes those who only find him in Death
    For these people have finally come to the Truth that Life is beautiful in Eternal Life and they are ready for the next stage of existence
    Very Well said
    This write definately made me think
    Good Job!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Admittedly, those who have taken cutting as a hobby aren't the ones I follow here. It calls for a drama I don't quite understand. And yet there is a sorrow and compassion for any who who missed the notion of esteem, and that their parents or parent failed to pass it on.

    Obviously, you've taken a similar stance in regard to cutters. I play with poetry and to play with suicide, I would only wish that things get better. And clearly art is the conscious play of emotions in a controlled setting, so hurting ourselves could give way to healing.

    Nice job, it's good to know you're around,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting read.

    it made me think about the need for feeling.

    in world where pain is the opitimy of experience.

    it was a nice thought provoking write.

    keep it up

    PC
    | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    123206

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry