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    dots Submission Name: You’re free to be what you wanteddots
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    Author: wakethedead
    ASL Info:    34/M/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.99 - 13/13/9
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 494
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 842



    Description:
       A very special song I've written for my best friend who just broke up with her boyfriend. I describe this as an encouragement song. Wrote this song last December 15, 2001. A few friends who heard this from the CD I made. There was this one incident that my friend forget the CD at the CD Drive, and the next morning when she woke up, she saw and heard her brother singing my songs. It was great to know that someone could really appreciate my songs. I have remixed (re-edit), re-recorded some music in it.


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    dotsYou’re free to be what you wanteddots
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    Clarity of goodbye presupposes
    Understanding how to let go
    Freedom to be able to say these
    Only within its limitation

    You’re free to be what you wanted
    You’re free to be what you wanted

    Lead yourself out of confusion
    Open doors for a chance
    Pull yourself out of submission
    Time would heal all of the wounds
    …that lacerate the mind and heart

    You’re free to be what you wanted
    You’re free to be what you wanted

    Climbing yourself out this enigma
    Struggling for something to hold on

    You’re free to be what you wanted
    You’re free to be what you wanted

    Reveal the light beneath
    The darkness of the night
    Release the weight you bear
    From the memories you ignite




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      you know what i liked this poem/song alot. lacerate the heart was deffinitly one of my fav lines. yeah thats how most people feel when they break up with someone. "You're free to be what you wanted" kind of hits the heart. its like saying hey, im gone and here you go, here is your hopes and dreams, only with out me.

    -Death-
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by DeathTone | [ Reply to This ]


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