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    dots Submission Name: He Was Made in Chinadots
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    Author: Ensult
    ASL Info:    19/Male/New York
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 115/114/31
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1766
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    Description:
       I'm just way to angry right now to write normally so I
    use this poem to best express how I feel right now
    The rest is Self-explanatory.


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    dotsHe Was Made in Chinadots
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    Cold Steel with forceful intentions
    A beautiful man made blade
    Safe in my pocket to protect me

    Served me well in the past
    And has proved it's loyalty for the present
    Everyone else has feared him and from him they'll fear me
    Most worthy of my attention he is
    I keep his screws tight and his blade sharpened

    Always at my side for right time to die
    He holds more value to me than my girlfriend
    An object of grace in my eyes

    My bestfriend is 8" long unfolded and can reach 4"s inside you
    He's black and silver
    and some day you'll meet em'






    Submitted on 2004-05-27 07:42:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Never seen this side of you hon. But i love the passion. The determination that i feel when i read these kind of pieces. Where you have personified this inanimate object. Its genious T. O.
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by TremendoCulo16 | [ Reply to This ]
      i have a 6 inch friend that can only go 3 inches deep.. then i have a 8 inch friend.. but i wont speak of him any further .. haha.. good way to vent your anger
    ~*~amber~*~
    | Posted on 2004-10-05 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way you describe the knife in this write as if it were a real person and all...the subject is interesting and not over written like many other topics that are used...the only suggestion i have is maybe a different format...some spaces between the lines to make it easier to read and all...all in all good work!
    | Posted on 2004-05-27 00:00:00 | by morte | [ Reply to This ]


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