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    dots Submission Name: Through the Needle's Eyedots
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    Author: PolaroidMemory
    ASL Info:    18/F/IN
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 99/93/28
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 161
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 440



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       My friend Courtney (luvinanelevator) and I wrote this one together. I think it has to do with a guy trying to get with a girl, but he keeps lying to her. Thanks to Porcelaine for the title!!


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    dotsThrough the Needle's Eyedots
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    Reaching down into the depths of your fear.
    Forget the voices you think you hear.
    Dig down deep into your soul.
    You should find what makes you whole.
    You've used every line in the book,
    But all you got was one dirty look.
    Take all your lies to the grave;
    Along with all the hurt you gave.
    You can't be saved from the pain inside.
    You can run, but you can't hide.




    Submitted on 2006-10-30 18:04:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well done.

    Take all yours lies to the grave;
    Along with all the hurt you gave.
    You can't be saved from the pain inside.
    You can run, but you can't hide.

    That part ... up there, my favorite. I think your title should come from the lines here. Something, I can't suggest something myself considering its seven in the morning and I just got up. Anyways, I love this, going into my faves. You did very well, I applaud you!

    ~Kiki
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      The eye of a needle. Beets me. That's the one thing that came to me.
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      very short and to the point.. I liked it.. there are a few typo's but I'm sure you'll see them once you reread.. huuuuuuummmm on the title.. something along the lines of... "hide behind your lies" "lies will find you" I'm not good with titles either hope I could be of some help.

    Penny
    | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]



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