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    dots Submission Name: A Moment In The Twilight Zonedots
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    Author: Lisa Milligan
    ASL Info:    48/F/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 38/47/21
    Words: 366
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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       This is dedicated to my son.


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    dotsA Moment In The Twilight Zonedots
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    She has always loved jigsaw puzzles
    as far back as he can remember
    she gets at least one a year
    and leaves it on the kitchen table until it's done
    she gets the 1000 piece puzzles now
    her latest one is of lighthouses

    They talk a lot on the phone
    he started college a couple months ago
    she loves to hear about his day
    anything, everything he does
    it doesn't matter what they talk about
    because all she really wants to hear

    is his voice

    "I've been working on this thing since August"
    he can tell she's really irritated
    "1000 pieces, and I can't find the last damn piece"
    he tries not to let her hear him chuckle
    she has no idea how funny she is when she gets mad
    it's November and after all the time she's put into it
    she's sitting there on the other end of the phone
    totally pissed because one piece is missing
    "And it's right in the center where it's glaringly obvious"

    When he walked in the door, he could smell the pumpkin pie
    it was great to be home for Thanksgiving
    he almost fell over when he came in the door
    because she ran through the kitchen
    and threw herself at him, laughing
    and crying, and he spun her around

    She's so happy he's home for a few days
    he's going to help her put up the Christmas tree
    just like they've been doing for years over the Thanksgiving holiday
    she's also hoping she can talk him into steam cleaning the carpet
    and replacing the balcony screen door

    "Tomorrow I'm getting the turkey in early so we can eat by noon"
    Any time was fine with him, as long as he can be here
    "I'll make you a sandwich while you put your stuff away"
    He walked past the kitchen table towards his room
    "And if I'm lucky, maybe he'll find that damn puzzle piece" she mumbled to herself
    With his bag slung across his shoulder
    He glanced at the jigsaw puzzle
    "That's great" he thought to himself as he noticed

    The center piece isn't missing anymore






    Submitted on 2006-10-30 18:25:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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