Heart upon your sleeve? *chuckles* yeah...tell me about it. but you know...with a heart on a sleeve, it's only out there for people to see, I don't mind showing people my heart...i don't think you should either...doesn't make you foolish
I really dug that second stanza, and endless dream, seems like it doesn't it? always does for me anyway.
Good job with this. It's short, which I like, but what it conveys is what we're all after anyway.
Dude . . . . . . . this is amazing . . . . . . your poem are always so touching . . . . . . . . . . . they always make me think, and it always leave me wanting more . . . . . good job. . . . this part was my favorite :
A fool I wear my heart upon my sleeve
with hope I dream an endless dream in a dream
I don't know . . . . that's how I am right now . . . . . . . well I gotta comment on ya other stuff. peace man.
Alyin, you have a developing talent, and this poem shows it! Think of something you really like and write a poem about it! I think we can see some really nice material from you, and this write was intriguing and enjoyable!
"aalllrighty than, bumble bee tuna, bumble bee tuna, bumble bee tuna" god that's a great movie. Similar to this in a way. it goes in one direction, but has meaning in another. INteresting how many ways this can be taken, good day to you now!