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    dots Submission Name: I Care.dots
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    Author: MowsysWrath
    ASL Info:    15 Beastiality Bunghole
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 75/83/44
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 244
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1391



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       I mean it.

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    dotsI Care.dots
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    You think you're useless
    You think you're worth nothing
    You harm yourself to rid yourself of the thoughts...

    You think noone loves you, you think you're alone. You think You're in a world without someone to care...

    I Care.

    You think you're not important
    You think noone feels your worth their time
    You can't rid yourself of the thoughts...

    You think the world is against you, You think everyone is there to harm you, You think it's fair that you should die.

    I Care.

    I care about you, I care about your health. I care about your friends, I care about your life.

    I Care.

    Put down the razor, don't think of it any more. You have someone to care, someone loves you. You have a purpose, and you can't question that.

    I Care.

    Lay your head down, I'll bandage the wounds. I'll get your help, don't worry. You'll pull through, I'll make sure of it. I'm here to catch you because I Care.

    Don't do it again, I beg you. I scold you, I lecture you, I'll be here if you need me. You can tell me anything, I'll never tell anyone else. I'll help you down if you're willing to come with me.

    I Care.




    Submitted on 2006-10-30 23:10:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this hit rock bottom for me... i dont know really what to say but... thanks

    -em
    | Posted on 2007-12-26 00:00:00 | by black_shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Good piece, Mows, it's a tear jerker for sure. Describing in detail what this person is doing because of their depression hits hard and hits well. The message is very clear, but the style of writing threw me off a bit. It had an excellent flow at first, but around halfway through you just kind of lost it and went wild. It intrigued me, no question, but theres a definite bump in the flow of this piece.

    But, it's the message that counts, and this one showed one of the most simple of all- How to Care.

    Snake
    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by SnakeBite7 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, Mowsy now you're just trying to make me cry. Anyone who has gone through this feels exactly where you're coming from so it hits heart. Hitting heart poems are my favorite kind. Very very nice.




    Sita
    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by SitaSinclaire | [ Reply to This ]
      hey that was cool. its good that u care. cuZ somebody has to care.

    | Posted on 2006-11-27 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      LOoo-S-ER. I know what you mean though, however selfish and greedy the emotion may be. Sometimes you can't help but go after the broken ones eh ? And then you start talking to them, they seem like cool people, but there's a grip. They just can't go the mile, because they either sincerely don't believe in themselves or they've given into that feeling you get when death overcomes you - in your mind that is, not temporally. Well... I guess it's a nice thought on a site filled with the bipollarly opposed idea - but you did make mistakes. Which is why I am here

    -You think noone feels your worth their time.
    -I'll get your help, don't worry.

    That's about everything I can see, except maybe adding "I beg of you".. but that's a personal whim - whatever... I'm tired already.... and I just got up. UGH.

    Outlaw
    | Posted on 2006-11-13 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, it made me cry though.

    great write bryce



    Haley...
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by haley_ima-mess_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, sorry I didn't get around to commenting on this sooner. All I have to say is that it's really good and thank you.
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by CharlieKat | [ Reply to This ]
      this sounds like something my boyfriend would say. [insert wiping tears away here]. i think its really awesome that you are there to catch her/him when she/he falls. keep it up and dont let her fall.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]


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