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    dots Submission Name: Alonedots
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    Author: EsCaPisT
    ASL Info:    17,Female,Singapore
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 42/38/38
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 961
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 592



    Description:
       not exactly a poem...more like a messy flow of thoughts.i need a fixed heart-and mind, maybe to clean it up!!


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    dotsAlonedots
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    It's raining and i'm all alone
    And you're not here to bring me home
    But you left town to see her eyes
    And left me here cold as ice

    Why'd you ask me to stay
    When you will go
    Why'd you ask me to say
    What you don't know

    It hurts just the same
    So leave me this way
    All alone and trembling
    Crying with my heart breaking
    It will be healed by someone else
    Who could say what you don't know:
    Love and all its wonders
    So leave me alone..




    Submitted on 2006-10-30 23:35:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Interesting, and (as I've just said to gloomyanddoomy) it flows like a song. I don't know if you intended it, but with a little editing...Not bad.
    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]


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