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    dots Submission Name: put the poor beast out of its miserydots
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    Author: Kristen Gudsnuk
    ASL Info:    21/f/CT
    Elite Ratio:    5.62 - 182/229/86
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 827
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 752



    Description:
       haha... believe it or not, this is all the result of intense procrastination. I HATE COLLEGE. I hate education. All I want is a little cabin with art supplies and books and a typewriter. I don't need people, I don't need anything, just me, alone, gloriously lonely.


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    dotsput the poor beast out of its miserydots
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    I wander down meandering conch-shell staircases
    muttering to myself like a schizo,
    'kill me, kill me, someone, god fucking kill me'

    my fingers skim the whitewashed walls
    the lights are harsh and cold and probing
    and my spirit feels like a hairball in the drain
    I whisper,
    'please God, I'll believe in You if you'll just
    strike me down and kill me kill me kill me'

    the same blaring songs teething on my fragile nerves
    the silence is uglier
    my room is a grotesque pile of yesterday's clothes, empty bottles of diet coke, papers and books like dead butterflies, wings bent and askew on the floor
    kill me kill me kill me




    Submitted on 2006-10-31 00:37:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good write. good length, good word choise. you made me feel it, you could probably make soomone who doesnt usualy feel it feel it, how would i know though, im not her. the imagry is perfectly painful. the acheing shows, mingled with the evanescent hope that there might be a god to hear you. no critisism today,

    happy halloween, -erin
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Saphire Twiligh | [ Reply to This ]


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