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    dots Submission Name: The Nightdots
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    Author: fiery whisper
    ASL Info:    21/F/Bangladesh
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 51/49/33
    Words: 545
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
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       Was sitting around getting bored, thinking about the night and how I pictured it. This came up. Its not how I see the night, but I thought it could be. Somehow or the other nights always represent a struggle, a fight for something, I dont know what. It seems wise and burdened and so much more. So I wrote this. Would love to know what you find in it.


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    dotsThe Nightdots
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    The night was dark, dark, soundless and surreal. And it sat on the edge of the world, its dark cape engulfing the surroundings, hiding everything but sparks of light, twinkles of blue and yellow and that giant boulder of silver. It did not speak, night did not, for silence was its complany, its sole friend and its everlasting nightmare. Night simply sat, ones here, and then there, moving about with the swish of a coat that wrenched the world out of the pitch blackness, made it see ones more the light of the day, but only as a tease; for night knew it would be back, and it did get back. With the shadows that followed it around, the grey wisps of faint hearted ghosts and the sinewy branches of obscure trees, those leaves that rustled under the moon for the shudder on all things living, those shivers at the edges of the river, the sea and the ocean, the night lived, quietly, in a haven of its own creation, lost to all but itself and it carried out its tasks in this world and others with a flourish unmatched. Night was king.

    And night was getting old.

    For with each blinking light of the world, it had to strenghten its darkness, had to darken its cape, its cape of despair and night wasnt doing too well. And night could not speak and night could not complain, it simply worked, this endless game of hide and seek, this patchwork of light and darkness that worked its magic in worlds here and beyond. Night was suffering, suffering as time flew by itself, suffering as time danced and swirled in the dimensions inexplicable, laughing, laughing at the torture and the pain, laughing at night, as night weaved a coat harder to pierce, strung threads of colors deeper than black and wished, wished with all its heart that it could speak, that it could explain, that it could seek to comprehend, to the worlds here and beyond that night was for darness, night was for dreams, night was for solitary walks along shorelines of blue, blue and gold, sparkling clear gold and whites that crashed into thousand pieces among those golds.

    But night, it could not speak, it could only do what it had been meant to, forever stuck in the destiny that many sought. It knew its purpose and its meaning, it knew its sole reason for being, and night, it answered its calling, but there was little more it could do. With each light that lit up the meadows, each green letter that appeared on blocks of steel and chrome, each unearthly sound that escaped the willies of the glass, night despaired. It fought with the disaster that brewed within and it battled. It raged a war with all that showed and it tried. Tried so hard. Tried with every detail of its being, with every ounce of its power, with every fibre of its cape and yet it could not. Did not complete what it was called upon to do.

    And so it cried.

    Blood tears.

    Ever since, the night sky, the once upon a time deep dark night sky, comes with streaks of red and purple.




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      The night is misuderstood excepting by a few, the likes of you. The night is friendless mostly. The night is feared. They all need to hide when the night casts its shadows. Yet little do they understand, or rather they refuse to understand, that the night is only casting a protective wing over the world. Like a mother hen does to her chicks. The protective layer of truth and of eternity.

    They all need the comfort of fake lights to iluminate themselves so as to evade the darkness. There is darkness all around. It is not necessary that I am talking about emotional or the characteristics of any of them. Still, the fact remains that they try to hide away within these created light. Don't they realise that the darkness is the eternity and the light of daylight just exist within finite boundaries? Well, I guess not.

    The night is not evil, they just assume it to be. The deep character and the shades of comfort cannot be brought at any bustling daylight. The night fights on for the right cause as you mentioned it fights. Yet, the battle will go on for an eternity and still not end. It is daylight again and the night crying with blood tears yet again.

    The blood of those fallen martyrs. Or those innocent sacrificed victims of the sun god like that of the Aztecs. The night never did anyone any harm. It was just misinterpreted every single time. They darkness is used to carry out deeds that it strives to prevent. Then again the tenacity of these fell creatures called humans can never undermined.

    Only if I had my wings strong enough to soar through the night sky from night sky so that I never had to face the pretentious world that is brought forth with light. There is nothing wrong with the day but it is just so infested with immorality that it is unbearable.

    I know what you mean about the strolls and all that. It is just a beautiful ideology and a very innocent and pure longing. I wish things were the way you long them to be. So that we could walk arm in arm and fly with our wings outstretched. Conquering the skies and ruling our dreams into eternity.

    peace love and empathy,

    yours
    | Posted on 2006-11-13 00:00:00 | by forestspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      I love all the descriptions; they are so vivid and i love some of ways you kinda of formed the picture of what was going on.

    Its dark cape engulfing the surroundings

    You can just picture a pitch black night with the stars and moon hidden behind the clouds.
    I also like the way you talk about how the sun is slowly lighting up the sky and the night kinda trying to fight it off. It's sweet. Another great write.

    pEAcE
    Liz
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by smartblond | [ Reply to This ]



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