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    dots Submission Name: Drunken One Night Standdots
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    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    32 / Male / United States
    Elite Ratio:    5.54 - 81/55/30
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1038
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    Description:
       This is what happens when you have one night stands and you both are drunk. I know alot of guys that only want this. I think this is a twist from "Art of Love" which shows a lighter side of sex, this is more so (dare i say) realistic. Well at least i think so.


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    dotsDrunken One Night Standdots
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    Ravage the body that I borrowed, to feel the thrill of the moment
    For compaction does not exist here, and I love you not
    I donít know your name, nor do I really care
    I see the one thing I came to conquer; this is the goal in mind
    Like an animal I attack at will, and you let me in
    As quick as we can, unclothed we become
    I grab your hair and toss you on the bed, you beg for more
    While face down, you grab my hand and cover your mouth
    Keeping you quite, and forcing me upon you
    With out any care I reach inside, granting our most provocative wishes
    Forcefully I take what I want, while you do as I say
    Flip you on your back, Iím still in control
    Put my hands on your throat, and squeeze a little
    The sheets are soaked, but not by me
    Two hearts pumping deep and heavy, how long can this last
    On your knees you go, ready for the final blow
    Finished we are, and away you go

    -Death-




    Submitted on 2006-10-31 05:39:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Bravo, The vikings would be proud!!

    Did she die in the end? I hope she did not, so she could wash the damn sheets!

    course yet fluent almost seamless in its pace beautiful yet sordid. perfection in a poem.
    | Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by Biffa | [ Reply to This ]
      for some reason, i keep finding myself reading your pieces... wanting to say something, but too... awe stuck to say anything that makes sense... lol. i really liked this piece. the imagery in it is amazing, almost like... i'm right there in bed with ya..... lol. ok. anyway. you really did a great job here, and i will be adding this to my favs.

    -Poetic
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Poetic | [ Reply to This ]
      raw, unadulterated passion. love it!
    i don't have a fav part either, i love the whole thing.
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is fantastic, it is so very true to life. I have in my younger years (she says at the ripe old age of 25) had a few one night stands, and the way you have discribed the pure act of lust and acting on the moment is so completely the way it is.

    On your knees you go, ready for the final blow
    Finished we are, and away you go

    Superb. I would pick this if I had to disect it as my favourite part, but, in fairness, the whole piece grabbed me from start to finish. I think that the use of punctuation really slows it down and makes you think about what you have read.

    A fantastic job and another addition to my favourites!
    Frann. x
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Effee | [ Reply to This ]


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