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    dots Submission Name: Your Dirty Little Secretdots

    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 655
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       I've never been cheated on, but this is something that just came to me, inspired by a dream. I'm not sure its all that good, but I like it.

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    dotsYour Dirty Little Secretdots

    You've enthralled me now,
    With your irresistable charm,
    I have fallen head over heels,
    And see no need to be alarmed.

    We've seen so many lovely nights,
    Wasted away days in pure rapture,
    Made love in your bed of sin,
    My heart you've so easily captured...

    Swept away by your unending lies,
    Your well of deception overflows,
    My heart of glass, cracked before,
    Now shattered by lies exposed.

    You lay me down at night,
    And return to her every day.
    To the one you had before,
    I've been fooled and betrayed.

    It was my own mistake to be so blind,
    It really was too good to be true,
    My mascara tears flow endlessly,
    Never have I felt so blue...

    But be forewarned, my love,
    I won't remain your dirty little secret,
    Pay back is a beautiful bitch,
    The worst in me, you've not seen yet.

    Submitted on 2006-10-31 06:38:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Man, this is a great poem! I love the ending. So powerful.

    "Pay back is a beautiful [censored],
    The worst in me, you've not seen yet."

    That made me smile! I know almost exactly how you feel. You have captured the emotions very well in this poem. Hope to read more from you...:)


    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i really liked it. Fits my mood perfectly.
    I really liked the last line. totally didn't see it coming. I also loved:
    "my mascara tears flow endlessly"
    i thought it was beautiful.
    great job!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by -amberina | [ Reply to This ]
      I know this isn't fiction for you, I hope you forget him and move on. Just kill him with kindness. I think you'd be a better person for it.
    I like the poem, but it kinda reads like a soap opra. which is good if you take out line 19.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      this was ok i didnt like the line...Never have I felt so blue...i think you could express how you feel better than that
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by bestdeceptions | [ Reply to This ]
      It's...WOW! I seem to find the poems at the right time that fit my mood. I love the last verse because payback is a beautiful [censored] and noone wants to get in the way of it.
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]

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