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    dots Submission Name: by the waydots
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    Author: gloomyanddoomy
    ASL Info:    17,female
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 81/426/527
    Words: 337
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 577
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1954



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    dotsby the waydots
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    In the winding down hours
    I let your heart down again
    (What did I do to make a scene so gory?)
    (I'm no better than the ones before me)
    Old habits die hard
    I always end up hating the end
    (What did I do to make a scene so gory?)
    (I'm no better than the ones before me)

    I'm in the middle of a breakdown
    Watching you scream
    In the middle of a breakdown
    Screaming your name
    And by the way
    By the way
    What made you think
    you'd have it your way?
    And by the way
    By the way
    Don't say I didn't warn you
    That I'll always stay the same

    Speechless and frozen
    Uncomfortable silence again
    (What did I do to make a scene so gory?)
    (I'm no better than the ones before me)
    I'm in the middle of a breakdown
    Watching you scream
    In the middle of a breakdown
    Screaming at me
    And by the way
    By the way
    What made you think you'd have it your way?
    And by the way
    By the way
    Don't say I didn't warn you
    That I'll always stay the same

    Battered and bruised
    Broken confused
    It's time we both knew
    Can't stop what I started
    This time we both lose, lose
    And by the way
    By the way
    What made you think
    you'd have it your way
    And by the way
    By the way
    Don't say I didn't warn you
    That I'll always stay the same
    The same, the same,
    I'll always stay the same
    (battered and bruised)
    The same, (broken confused), the same
    I didn't warn you that
    I'd always stay the same

    Deticated to: Demetrius Hernandez





    Submitted on 2006-10-31 06:59:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      crismons right you should think about that but in other words its good keep writin pratice makes perfect
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Cara R.D | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds like lyrics. I don't know about the 'battered and bruised' line, it's a little close to something I've seen in a few pro songs, but...Consider writing music for this.
    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]


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