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    dots Submission Name: Chains of Lovedots

    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsChains of Lovedots

    O' flowers of beauty,
    beautiful hues.
    Roses, violets, and lilies,
    reds, whites, and blues.
    Beginnings of spring,
    joy from the heart.
    Love is so sweet,
    yet bitterly tart.
    It binds us together,
    without reprieve.
    It brings us joy
    we cannot believe.
    A life of love
    is life complete.
    The chains of love
    we cannot defeat.
    We are bound together,
    whether we like it or not.
    We share a deep trust
    that cannot be bought.
    Our souls rise together
    on the wings of a dove.
    Forever together,
    bound by true love.

    Submitted on 2006-10-31 08:24:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm sure you are not surprised, I'm another big fan of this poem..and I have read some other poems of yours and I have nothing negative to say. This piece was simply beautiful, simple yet original..the wording was great, the feeling that we can all relate to. But the rhyming and concept was so wonderfully put together that it definatly brought out the beauty of it.

    but one small thing,
    I think it would've sound better if it were:
    "is (a) life complete"

    Great Job!
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      This is amazing, probably by far one of the best love poems I've ever read. You're a talented poet... keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by RayneDownAsh | [ Reply to This ]
      OMFG. I meant OMGDFD! that was wonderful. And i didn't get the first comment. damnit!!!!!!!! But I still love it, because its so true you know? we cannot defeat it no matter what!

    ^_^ Twisted
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      Here's one line I can't stop repeating and it's cliché'd in my comments: the rhymes are perfect and fluid. It wouldn't sound as good without them. This is very vivid, starting with the motives: flowers and the colours of springtime. Also, I am very surprised that you have written such a light (as opposed to dark) poem. But I have to admit that I am guilty of something similar too. By the way, it's beautiful and I'm sorry.
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a beautiful piece of poetry.
    Good form, flow and rime.
    I like everything about this poem.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      a really good poem,well put and rhymed together.(We share a deep trust
    that cannot be bought.) a very very true line,that some people don,t follow in life. that,s love,youv,e hit the nail in the head with that line. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
      put so simply, yet sounds so very beautiful.
    great job, i love the begining, the descripition of the flowers, fits so well.
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

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