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    dots Submission Name: Hopedots
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    Author: Katana Ryoko
    ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483/428/109
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 887
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 542



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       Maybe we can be together again...


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    dotsHopedots
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    Hope keeps me from tears
    Dashes away all my fears
    Makes me believe in a day
    When we will have our way
    If the love is still there
    Will you accept this dare
    And ask me out again
    To revive what has been
    The center of my universe
    Love so deeply immersed
    The feeling of you that I miss
    Us locked in an infernal kiss
    And so much that is no more
    Cuz our hearts that we tore
    Have given up on what can be
    A lasting life between you and me




    Submitted on 2006-10-31 12:45:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A sad and teary write to be sure ... love's labor lost to quote the Bard ... well and most deftly done ... cogent and nicely and potently understated, always best in poetry ... well done all around ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... Micahel
    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the poem, we all feel like this once in a while and you do deserve it it sounds like it was a hard time good wording
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by psycho love | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so sad
    I just had to say that.
    Cheers and smile
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      very well written. my favorite lines were "Hope keeps me from tears
    Dashes away all my fears" i like the way they sound. Anyways another great write. i hope it all works for you.
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the poem and I hope he reads it too.
    Anyone who can write like this should get a second chance.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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