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    dots Submission Name: Boogie Mandots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625/583/217
    Words: 389
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 716
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    dotsBoogie Mandots
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    I'm standing in the shadows
    I know your every step,
    you have no idea Iím here
    though I sense your every breath;
    I know all of who you are
    even better so than you,
    I know all about your past
    and what you wanna do!
    I know your fears,
    I know your dreams,
    I know you toss and turn,
    watching you when you sleep!

    I'm the one over your shoulder
    when you feel someoneís following you;
    I'm the one looking through the pane
    when you're alone, and nobody can see you.
    The one who possesses
    what you knew you once had,
    I'm the one who will seal your fate
    Depictating where you're buried at
    you swear you've seen me lurking,
    but looked and I wasn't there.
    you convince yourself you're paranoid
    Now I have you worn in despair

    As you walk back to your room
    you don't remember leaving on the light,
    tell yourself you must have
    than sheets held tightly, call it a night.
    but when you wake up you know,
    you didn't sleep alone last night
    the TVís off and there's footprints
    now you wish you weren't right!
    I'm the one over your shoulder
    when you feel someone following you,
    I'm the one looking through the window
    when you're alone, and someone's watching you!
    I'm the one who posses
    what you know you once had,
    I'm the one who will seal your fate
    and decide where you're buried at!

    you run quickly to use the phone
    only to find the lineís dead;
    a sudden gust of breeze, with tapping at the window
    leaves you frantic, you scream, and turn your head.
    though Iím already behind you
    you don't know Iím right there,
    I rap the piano chord around your neck
    than snuggly pull on your hair.
    As your life flashes through your eyes
    you realize, you still don't know who I am
    but Iíve known you for a very long time
    and I kiss your beautiful corpse, as I burry it in the sand..




    Submitted on 2006-10-31 17:48:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Booger and his side-kick Snot like to tell people how to knock on doors, but there's always a trick to it, you have to knock just right. It's really just a game with them, no matter how you knock, no one will open the door.

    Sleep tite.
    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Hun, I wait forever for you to write something and *sighs* maybe I'm just too used to you being a bit more original, or maybe I just need to stop setting expectations for people when they clearly haven't asked for them. This wasn't bad, it's just so.....predictable. your ending was kewl though, hell maybe I am emo...maybe that's why I constantly write about heartbreak, masochism, suicide and depression and don't even see the appeal in all that much on opposite spectrums. I don't even know. This was a hell of a lot of first person for a somewhat impersonal write....unless you still see symbolism in it for who you "are" or want to be, in which case I'm wrong about that one too. I only ever really did like one or two writes where I used "I am" anything....one of them I love almost obsessivly though.
    byes,
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      dude that was freaky.

    awsome write yo

    I miss my imaginary friend now.
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]


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