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Sadness Eternal


Author: Katana Ryoko
ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483 /428 /109
Words: 20
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Sadness Eternal



Sadness leaking
Leaking tears
Tears dripping
Dripping down
Down forever
Forever darkness
Darkness closing
Closing in
In misery
Misery eternal




Submitted on 2006-10-31 18:00:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You can be a very depressing person, you know that? I like this one. I'm not sure, but I'll think about adding it to my Favorites...

--crimson echo
| Posted on 2006-11-17 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
  I've seen the last word-starting-the-next-line form before, but it's been awhile, so this was a pleasant surprise. I really like this, and i hope you continue writing like this, maybe going for longer sentences. Thumbs up.


~Kane~
| Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
  Very original. I love it. I think I'll add it to my faves. I really loved the beautiful flow, very nice. Keep it up!

~Kiki
| Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
  beautifully sad...i thought this was very well written. I like the set up of your poem. the flow was perfect. keep writting.
| Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a great poem. I love how you continued with the last word of each line. I've never tried that and I would like to now that I've read it. I'm sorry that you are feeling blue at the moment. I hope you perk up soon. Great job.
Christina
| Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Super_pudding | [ Reply to This ]


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