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    dots Submission Name: Sadness Eternaldots
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    Author: Katana Ryoko
    ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483/428/109
    Words: 20
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsSadness Eternaldots
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    Sadness leaking
    Leaking tears
    Tears dripping
    Dripping down
    Down forever
    Forever darkness
    Darkness closing
    Closing in
    In misery
    Misery eternal




    Submitted on 2006-10-31 18:00:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You can be a very depressing person, you know that? I like this one. I'm not sure, but I'll think about adding it to my Favorites...

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2006-11-17 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      I've seen the last word-starting-the-next-line form before, but it's been awhile, so this was a pleasant surprise. I really like this, and i hope you continue writing like this, maybe going for longer sentences. Thumbs up.


    ~Kane~
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
      Very original. I love it. I think I'll add it to my faves. I really loved the beautiful flow, very nice. Keep it up!

    ~Kiki
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      beautifully sad...i thought this was very well written. I like the set up of your poem. the flow was perfect. keep writting.
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great poem. I love how you continued with the last word of each line. I've never tried that and I would like to now that I've read it. I'm sorry that you are feeling blue at the moment. I hope you perk up soon. Great job.
    Christina
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Super_pudding | [ Reply to This ]


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