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    dots Submission Name: Good Morningdots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625/583/217
    Words: 412
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
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    dotsGood Morningdots
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    I woke up this morning
    it's a beautiful day outside,
    it makes me sick
    and I want to die!
    No, I want to kill
    but no ones in reach,
    listen to me closely, but remember
    I don't practice what I preach!
    I'm laying out this fantasy
    doing it right before you
    I already feel sensational
    as I think of you...

    I want to watch you bleed and scream
    to beg and plead to live!
    to watch you run and tremble in fear
    I'm smiling as I think of this;
    I want to hear your voice quiver
    and see the terror in your eyes,
    you have no idea how soothing it is
    listening to those solemn gasps and sighs!
    you don't know who I am
    for I walk alone down the street,
    I attend church weekly and teach
    but Iím not like the company I keep.
    you come to me for advice
    your children look up to me ,
    I'm your siblingsí best friend
    your spouse and parents think Iím sweet!?

    don't say there's something wrong with me
    just because I enjoy this!
    my adrenalines starting up again
    We all need to feel a sense of bliss;
    I want to watch you bleed and scream
    to beg and plead to live!
    to watch you run and tremble in fear
    I'm smiling as I think of this,
    I want to hear your voice quiver
    and see the terror in your eyes.
    you have no idea how soothing it is
    listening to those solemn gasps and sighs!

    My heart gradually begins to race
    as I slowly pick up the knife,
    taking your life away, with the one's you love
    it somehow makes me feel more alive!?
    I take the knife to your throat
    than slice from side to side,
    I see the blood gushing out
    as I look you in your eyes;
    now that your family has seen
    I gleefully kill them as well
    than I sit down and eat your dinner; smiling
    wondering whom next to kill...!?
    but it's a beautiful day outside
    and now that Iím done
    everything seems alright
    now that Iíve had a little funÖ




    Submitted on 2006-10-31 18:09:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ... gourd. To be perfectly candid, there is no art to this.
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]
      I've a pretty sick mind, but this made me smile. okay, admitadly it wasn't overly clichť but it wasn't overly original either....it was hovering in what I'd consider a healthy medium between the two I guess. Despite how I feel about anyone actually killing another; writing and reading about that kinda thing ("criminal psychology" etc.) really interests me....quite possibly too much. omg....*curses herself for mixing bloodlust and fantasy into one hell of an awesome scene...lol...in anime .* lmao, I'm so weird . anyway I [censored] loved this write, but you don't want to know what it made me think of.
    peace,
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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