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    dots Submission Name: A toast to friendshipdots

    Author: TheBlackFairy
    ASL Info:    18/female/Caldwell
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 32/29/15
    Words: 305
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 812
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       His name was Andrew, and i truely will never forget his betrail

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    dotsA toast to friendshipdots

    A toast to a friendship we said would never end,
    The last fucked up game of lets pretend,
    It's good to embrace the end of tears,
    Time to let go of all those fears,
    To let the music play for I saw the real you today,
    And heard the fatal words,
    Dont be their is all you said
    while looked into those once friendly eyes,
    It's now clear that everything we said
    and all the smiles were all just lies
    I believed for a while,
    Maybe I was naive,
    But now I see that you never truly needed me,
    It hurts to be used,
    But in the end I guess it you who will truly lose,
    For in real life there is no more second chances or stupid romances,
    For now no matter what you do,
    This girl will never believe in you again,
    All the lies that made me cry have made me strong,
    For in my heart I know that you were wrong,
    Now its time to raise your glass in one final toast
    to a friendship you wasted,
    One that went down the drain,
    This friendship that use to drive me insane,
    You just lost the one thing you truly had,
    A friend who would always stick by you,
    and now that your gone,
    All I have to say is so long
    to the idiot who was once a gentlemen,
    goodbye to the man who always lied,
    have fun in the world for you wil; never hear from this girl again,
    If you do, all I'll ever say to you is I haven't forgotten that game you play,
    so I hope you remember the best friend
    you let slip away on that fateful night,
    before graduation day.

    Submitted on 2006-10-31 21:53:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i must say this is an interesting poem with a lot of depth i agree with Katana about the spelling and grammer but otherwise it looks like it is well constructed and flows nicely from begining to end
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by psycho love | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really good poem, but it needs to be revised. The way you break up the sentences could be done better and spelling and grammar need to be checked. If you do this you will have a great poem.
    | Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]

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