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    dots Submission Name: fallen leavesdots
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    Author: gjenkins
    Elite Ratio:    1.85 - 88/107/97
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsfallen leavesdots
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    the sunlight flickers
    on me between
    houses
    while driving in my car
    taking my daughter to
    school
    the leaves are falling everywhere
    making way for the
    frost
    she has early morning testing,
    what can I say we are tested
    and categorized by majority
    opinion,
    why not testing?
    testing is all
    we need to succeed,
    I'm still being tested
    now as a father,
    it's an absurd predicament.
    I pull up to the school
    get in a three block long line
    with the other parents, sitting in
    conversation, criticism, some frown
    and others have twisted smiles.
    which door, I ask.
    that one, she points.
    I proceed,
    then stop at the door.
    see ya later dad.
    ok, I say.
    I make a left to get back on
    the road.
    the leaves are all over the place:
    all over the road,
    on smoking houses,
    all over the parked cars.




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