Finding True Love -------------------------------------------
When my Heart Feels all Alone
I Look to the Beauty of this Beautiful Earth
And Find the Trees
With Their Swaying Branches
Reaching Out
To Welcome me as A Friend
Into Their Peaceful Realm
I Find the Sun
Eager to Warm my Heart
And Bring some Happiness
Into A Life
That has been Lonely for Far too Long
I Find the Flowers
With Their Vibrant Rich Colors
They Bring Love to my Life
Filling the Empty Space
That was Vacated
By the Death of my Grandmother
So Long Ago
I Take A Deep Breath and Inhale
Not Only the Precious Gift of Life
But the Beautiful Scenery
And Let It Lift me Higher
Not Afraid to Feel
All The Love that Surronds Us
As I Exhale
I am Left With New Life
And I Move Forward
Welcoming In A New Day
I Then Slowly Start To Realize
I am Never Alone
For Love is Everywhere
You Just Have To Open Your Heart
And Let the Beautiful Scenery
Create the Love You So Desire
A nice description of 'life' and finding 'true love' ....
That's just what so many people need to realize ....the world is full of love ..if only we realized it .........
Its good that you understood this and put it so well in words so that others may share these thoughts too.
There was no rhyme but the poem had its own charm still.......I liked it.
Its good Ron............ But it is a bit painfull.
Thats a good thing,It brings me back 2 a lot
of times in my own life. Kinda makes me wanta
Run. Good Work..............!
A long time sinde i do not read yours writing, my dear friend. And i love it... it is just so true...
I am having some love problñems and you made me realize that is just simple to find love from the earth, from every little thing in this planet. thanks a lot
and if you have time please take a look to my work
bye and peace and love
have a nice day!
Victor
WOW... i'll tell you that this would be something to read after a rough day. it is insperational.
It gives me a wider view of life, of the wonderful things IN life itself. I don't think i could ever write something this beautiful... my moods swing way too much!! LOL
the wording, atleast to me was a little iffy, but in all it left me with a nice calm feeling.
Thanks for a wonderful read and your comment from earlier.
Peace to you.
Wow ROn...this was so peaceful and sweet. the imagry that you gave and the feelings that came off the page were warm and uplifting! Finaly a guy that sees the beauty in the world as something other than boring...Your poetry is gracful and I think that it is really great...Keep up the great writing...
Toodles
Katie
It's a rare thing to find a peice on this website (at least from what ive searched, but that might be the first problem) that is uplifting like this one does such a good job of. It's good to know there are people out there that think as you do Ron, thanks for the read.
Hi Ron
Kudos to you on your ode. This was so whimsical that it filled me with lots of joys. Even i acknowledge Almighty's blessings which are around us and make our lives jubilant. I wonder at His creations which are bestowed on us. He is really an adroit creator. He is prevalent in each of his creations and is always around us and we are never alone.
It's so beautiful, this piece of yours manage to lift my sorrow heart for a moment of happiness, God truely created the world with many beautiful things, and all we need to do is to open our eyes to see ;) Thanks for a great reminder
What a beautiful thought...that true love is simply loving life...and I think once we all learn to do that...that's when we're able to let other kinds of love in. This poem lifted me up from kind of a bad day...made me realize that as bad as things seem sometimes...there is love EVERYWHERE. And I don't have to look very hard to find it. Thanks. I needed that. Great write. ~hailie~
Interesting write Ron, saw your shout on the shoutbox thingy and figured I'd give it a shot.....though we clearly have VERY different outlooks on life. The write itself was okay but I really felt the capitals were kind of distracting. (lol...remember in old chat? with mike and all the old gang...you'd just randomly type in caps .) This was somewhat agreeable for me....life, things....they aren't anything without the meaning we add to them, and sometimes it's not even on a concious level but it's still there ya know? Ron I think you'd benefit from writing a darker write, and no, I'm not trying to bring out any negative side or anything, I just...well, knowing a little about your past, i think you'd be welcoming a new spectrum of readers and showing them that you relate to them too; if they saw that you were once more like them then they'd see contrast and be more likely to believe that maybe things do and can get better for some people.....I dunno, just a suggestion really. nice write, ~jess
Wow long time for me to be on here and looking at your write. I know I have always been a fan of your work but I definetly like this one and I will begin to explain why. Believe it or not I have learned in school about writers, not poem writers really but story writers that write about nature and these guys are Thoreau and Emerson (I don't remember the first names) and they talk about the beauty of nature and the love of it. You reminded me so much of them when I read this. You talk about how nature is beautiful and there is really love all around because nature is always open to us. There is love in nature but no one takes the time out of their life to realize it which is something that Emerson and Thoreau try to bring up. I think this is a point you were trying to make in here so I hope people realized it. So yes I really enjoyed this Ron and I think it just might have to go to that favorites list of mine. And this is probaby the best comment I have ever left you because I guess you could called it an educated comment? lol I dunno but great work and I hope to hear from you soon!!
Nice work Ron, you always find the positive in amy situation. That you remind the rest of us to do so is your gift to us.
I think on the subject of caps I would go easier on them. I used to capitalize one word in a stanza and it made that one word significant. I hope that makes sense.
Yeah, I can totally sympathize with this. There are times when I catch myself just staring at a tree because sunlight seems to be flooding through its bleeding red color and I can't look away. Only thing is that it seems just a tad short of poetic. Like, it could use a little more poesy, it's just too...bright. Too happy, but the problem is I find that in true poetic art, everything in the piece can't be sunny and happy. There has to be some drop of poignancy in it. There is a very famous saying, "All joy is tinged with a hint of sorrow." Your poem sort of taps at sorrow, but then ruins it by mentioning the grandmother. That just sort of sticks out like an unneeded detail. Enough of my rambling, though. Hope you found this comment helpful.
Hmmm. Had one of those moments eh? I have 'em sometimes xD when you look around you and see the world isn't half as bad as what we make it out to be. A beautiful place...that humanity is destroying.
anyway, good write. keep it up! hope to hear from you soon
Ron, Another great write, Something about your poetry make me just want to read on, and that is the mark of a great writer. It looks as if you had one of those moments when you looked around and notice how amazing the world around us really is, I'm not saying that there is a God, per se, but if there is I give him major up's on the creation of the world, Great write, and thanks for the comments on "The Words", Will (Twice)
Ron, this was really special and a wonderful read! When we have learned to love nature and find pleasure in the natural surroundings around us, we are literally staning on the right hand of God!
Syntax is off with the constant capitals but other then that its an incredible write, and sorry for useing the devils word "Syntax" lol I hate it aswell. but anyways Ronyou never dissapoint sorry I dont get around to commenting more but its really time consuming.
You have much skill but still tend to lock urself around the same symbols or same idea/ideal's making you unable to expand withen your own writting, your skill is very much practiced, but it is not at a level were you break off into other things, Id really REALLY like to see a darker write or sumthing that reflects more so anothers view point from you, as I think it would truly show your ability, and allow you to shine beyond your brightest dreams.
Id appreciate your input on Amongst the Sandstorm part1/2 . talk to you later
I really like this piece of poetry. The title is totally misleading, but I like that. I enjoy your poems because they are so personal to you, and reflect your life. Excellent jpb, I really enjoye. ~Caotic~
Submission Name: Finding True Love
.) This was somewhat agreeable for me....life, things....they aren't anything without the meaning we add to them, and sometimes it's not even on a concious level but it's still there ya know? Ron I think you'd benefit from writing a darker write, and no, I'm not trying to bring out any negative side or anything, I just...well, knowing a little about your past, i think you'd be welcoming a new spectrum of readers and showing them that you relate to them too; if they saw that you were once more like them then they'd see contrast and be more likely to believe that maybe things do and can get better for some people.....I dunno, just a suggestion really. 