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    dots Submission Name: unknowndots
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    Author: redeemer
    ASL Info:    19/female/venus
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 85/93/58
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Story/Death
    Total Views: 619
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    Description:
       this is about a man that i loved very much and I wish he hadn't committed suicide, March 6, 2000. But he's gone almost 7 years now and i still miss his face, the way he laughed and how he always had a beer!!...


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    dotsunknowndots
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    It is unknown to me how I get up in the morning anymore
    Knowing that you won't be here to say, "I love you", just so I can say it back
    It is unknown to me where you are now.
    Are you in heaven or have you gone to hell
    Are you with the angels or has the devil become your new best friend?

    It is unknown to me why you did what you did
    Why you felt the need to leave this place
    It is unknown to me why you did what you did
    But I forgive you but will he^?
    That I cannot know for certain

    It is unknown to me if you know what you did to us?
    All of us, your sons, your mother, your father, brothers and sister, and me?
    But your sons I hope that you can feel their pain...
    But only so theirs is restrained and taken away.

    I hope you know that the world will turn without you near
    But the world was so much better when you were here...love ya...




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      Wow this is really sad. Is this about your uncle? . Well as a poem its great and I have no complaints. You better keep posting because your work is good and you have only shown me very few things you have written and none have been these. I like how you put in the beginning wondering whether he went to heaven or hell. For some reason it stuck out. Well anyways...I still love you!
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]


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