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Submission Name: Like I Did dots

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Author:	XpLiCiTKRiSiS
Elite Ratio:	1.03 - 3/23/20
Words:	195

Class/Type:	Lyrics/Love
Total Views:	481
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Like I Did dots

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In this life of screams, it's becoming a melody
In this ruptured heart of black, love is a felony
I'm so numb, I can't feel what's felt in me
Everything in my life has been gone, as fast as one, two, three

I just can't kiss you like I did
And I just can't hold you like I did
I just can't touch you like I did
And I just can't love you like I did

I've been sleep deprived, and lost in lust
I feel so addicted to you, my needs are a must
I want to go even further, but I need your trust
No can be just as good as biting the dust

I'm in a fragile state and I just might collapse
I'm lying on your bed about to die as time will elapse
I've never felt something so innocent and so pure
I feel so guilty, because your love is my cure

I just can't kiss you like I did
And I just can't hold you like I did
I just can't touch you like I did
And I just can't love you like I did

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real nice flow. I like the feeling it gives of coming and going toward something. keep it up.
| Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by bradengine | [ Reply to This ]
Hey nice lyrics, really good. I liked the rhyming in the stanzas and the way they were put together. It had a flow and...a story. Good job and keep writing.
| Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]

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