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    dots Submission Name: Like I Diddots
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    Author: XpLiCiTKRiSiS
    Elite Ratio:    1.03 - 3/23/20
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsLike I Diddots
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    In this life of screams, it's becoming a melody
    In this ruptured heart of black, love is a felony
    I'm so numb, I can't feel what's felt in me
    Everything in my life has been gone, as fast as one, two, three

    I just can't kiss you like I did
    And I just can't hold you like I did
    I just can't touch you like I did
    And I just can't love you like I did

    I've been sleep deprived, and lost in lust
    I feel so addicted to you, my needs are a must
    I want to go even further, but I need your trust
    No can be just as good as biting the dust

    I'm in a fragile state and I just might collapse
    I'm lying on your bed about to die as time will elapse
    I've never felt something so innocent and so pure
    I feel so guilty, because your love is my cure

    I just can't kiss you like I did
    And I just can't hold you like I did
    I just can't touch you like I did
    And I just can't love you like I did




    Submitted on 2006-11-01 18:15:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      real nice flow. I like the feeling it gives of coming and going toward something. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by bradengine | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey nice lyrics, really good. I liked the rhyming in the stanzas and the way they were put together. It had a flow and...a story. Good job and keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]


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