For Him

Author: iluvpoetry_1 Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 806 /439 /119 Words: 123

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For Him

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Once again I have failed I let myself go Put down all my beliefs All my self- respect and morals A few nice words And a kiss on the lips My guard fell short And my head began to spin Reality “You deserve better than this” Temptation “ But it feels so good” Ignoring the reality in the situation I let temptation take control With each kiss, my eyes squeezed to hold Back the burning tears. I have yet failed again Put down all my beliefs All my self- respect and morals … For him ~akaila evonne~

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i really like this one i can relate a lot...which in a way is really sad Reality “You deserve better than this” Temptation “ But it feels so good” My favorites lines out of the whole thing..they are so true...nice job <3

| Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]

Reality “You deserve better than this” Temptation “ But it feels so good” Ignoring the reality in the situation I let temptation take control those were probably some of the best lines you ever wrote in my opinion. this one is pretty good. is this about tony or your new bf?

| Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

I really like this because it feels real, like you really mean what you wrote. I think you did a nice job portraying your emotions. Very nice write.

| Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]

Straight from the heart and unedited. I liked you peom for its sincerity. Expect more from you. Please do keep posting

| Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Raghavan | [ Reply to This ]

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