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    dots Submission Name: For Himdots
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    Author: iluvpoetry_1
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 806/439/119
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 837
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    Description:
       i think u can figure this one out!!
    ~akaila~
    i put this under longing cuz i long for my self respect back!! and its not love! and im not depressed just a lil disgusted!


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsFor Himdots
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    Once again I have failed
    I let myself go

    Put down all my beliefs
    All my self- respect and morals

    A few nice words
    And a kiss on the lips

    My guard fell short
    And my head began to spin

    Reality

    “You deserve better than this”


    Temptation

    “ But it feels so good”


    Ignoring the reality in the situation
    I let temptation take control

    With each kiss, my eyes squeezed to hold
    Back the burning tears.

    I have yet failed again

    Put down all my beliefs
    All my self- respect and morals

    … For him

    ~akaila evonne~




    Submitted on 2006-11-01 21:03:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like this one

    i can relate a lot...which in a way is really sad

    Reality

    “You deserve better than this”


    Temptation

    “ But it feels so good”

    My favorites lines out of the whole thing..they are so true...nice job

    <3
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
      Reality

    “You deserve better than this”


    Temptation

    “ But it feels so good”


    Ignoring the reality in the situation
    I let temptation take control

    those were probably some of the best lines you ever wrote in my opinion. this one is pretty good. is this about tony or your new bf?
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this because it feels real, like you really mean what you wrote. I think you did a nice job portraying your emotions. Very nice write.
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      Straight from the heart and unedited. I liked you peom for its sincerity. Expect more from you. Please do keep posting
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Raghavan | [ Reply to This ]


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