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    dots Submission Name: When im gone...dots
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    Author: justkillme08
    ASL Info:    18/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 97/170/124
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 1115
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 928



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    dotsWhen im gone...dots
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    Donít cry a tear,
    When I go,
    I love you,
    And will miss you so.
    It was Gods choice to take me away,
    Now friends and family,
    Iím going there to stay.
    If I canÖ I will,
    Iíll come back to see you,
    But if I canít donít worry,
    Iím up above watching you.
    Donít worry about me Iíll be fine,
    Iím with God now,
    Iím an angel,
    And I can fly.
    So when the day you put my body to rest,
    Donít cry a single tear for me,
    For Iím still there I havenít yet left.
    Iím the breeze thatís blowing,
    The sun in your face,
    Iím everything around you,
    Iím still in that place.
    If you ever feel the hairs on your neck stand up,
    Donít be scares,
    Itís just me saying Iím there.
    So remember when Iím gone,
    Donít cry a tear,
    Cause all in all,
    Iím still here.




    Submitted on 2006-11-02 07:42:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awsume enjoyed reading it very much so.
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by thewantedwords | [ Reply to This ]
      man i just cant get enough of your poems there rockin,love the way you write you inspire me to write,me like this
    | Posted on 2006-11-17 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      This is incredible... but you have a spelling mistake :P Scares should it be SCared or is it supposed to be scares? but i realllly like this poem!! ^_^ your emotion was completely shown in this, is it about another person? if it is they should be flattered. keep it rockin'

    _*denny ;; [x3]
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by given_belief | [ Reply to This ]
      I am speachless, What is your motivation for your poetry?
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Lil_ Buddy | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... this was an amazing peice of poetry... the best i have ever read....
    i cant say anything more coz its so good i dont think i hav words to describe it....

    keep it up..

    cheers
    karen...
    | Posted on 2006-11-03 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... this was an amazing peice of poetry... the best i have ever read....
    i cant say anything more coz its so good i dont think i hav words to describe it....

    keep it up..

    cheers
    karen...
    | Posted on 2006-11-03 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]


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