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    dots Submission Name: Atomic Proportionsdots
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    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1252
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    Bytes: 766



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    dotsAtomic Proportionsdots
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    Iíve sanctioned the approval, nothing but fate to walk our path,
    angst and tragedy, the blasphemy lies in the wake of the aftermath,

    Inner delusions face reality wit a tumultuous realization,
    like a women facing birth from rapes infectious creation,
    The facts of tribulations, weighted actions judged by the soldiers,
    mass annihilations against the beauty of a grudge by the beholders,

    reports of casualties casually with nothing but the shrugs of shoulders,
    the violence ripped the silence like slugs from a holster,
    violins tensed while lips of guidance echoed to boaster,
    damned to smolder, lives were let go like hands in a coaster.




    Submitted on 2006-11-02 09:16:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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