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    dots Submission Name: Delightful Dreamsdots

    Author: Serenity4usall
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsDelightful Dreamsdots

    Delightful dreams from beside you,
    Warm and gentle in it's wake,
    Sensations so sweet to hold on to,
    Intensly in the love that we make.

    Soft heat from skin so near,
    Breath heavy with our desire,
    Whispers nearly too soft to hear,
    Feeding a hungry fire.

    Connecting, pulling so close,
    Tasting urgency in lips so fine,
    Feeling body, rigid and strong,
    Loosing all sense of time.

    Soft heat in anticipation,
    So alive to every touch,
    My soul in fastination,
    Able to offer so very much.

    Delightful dreams from deep inside you,
    Closed eyes to what we feel,
    Past thoughts seem quick to remind you,
    Perception is not always real.

    Soft heat too long been waiting,
    Frustrating my own imagination,
    Torturous thoughts cruely teasing,
    Until satisfying our consolidation.

    Numbing distance in heart and mind,
    Just out of reach, it seems,
    Insanity easy to consider kind,
    Never harming our delightful dreams.

    Submitted on 2006-11-02 14:28:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    i love it i think that the flow is just rite and i like how u worded it with perfect imagery in every stanza.

    i did find a few grammer and spelling mistakes. they are fairly easy to find. but i think u should fix them.

    all in all i love it! i look forward to reading more from u thanx for the read. good job and keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]

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