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When did my eyes start to reflect the past instead of the future? You look and see my tears my lessons, my reasons, my soul and my seasons.

Submitted on 2006-11-02 16:11:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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All I can say is nice... Short and sweet, & Painful. a back door Hiku. Thats true blue of you. The Poor Man's Poet.

| Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]

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