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Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 31
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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TO BE CONTINUED


When



When did my eyes
start to reflect the past
instead of the future?
You look and see my tears
my lessons, my reasons,
my soul and my seasons.




Submitted on 2006-11-02 16:11:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  All I can say is nice...
Short and sweet, & Painful.
a back door Hiku. Thats true blue of you.

The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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